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Of Love Lost

  • Aug. 23rd, 2007 at 3:59 AM
Fired up Semagic today, since I can check My Friends Page much faster.

Saw the 'edit window' and well....  Inspiration struck!  I tried putting words to the thoughts..  Check under the cut if you're curious.

A pome I did write, but I'm not happy with the way it came out.  I'm _not_ happy at all!!  *sad face*

My love lies await from the past,
till forever shall it be so....
My heart lies soft and gently a-beat,
safer nowhere than in your hands.

a silent thump that onward does parry,
to times of joy, complete but unaccounted.
For those eyes shine bright and starry,
when my own I happen to close....

There lies tender and timid yet strong,
a violent jolt, to reality awaken....
No voice unheard, no action be wrong,
this voice that follows is untimely shaken....

But hard I do try, and hide my heart,
but the surface ripples with unbroken zeal,
These dreams of mine, they are not lost,
for the dream world was by far more real!

I think in strobing genius like fashion,
and time it seems matters not....
But every beat that pumps through men,
reminds us men, that time's not caught!

See through me, the world within,
and touch my cheek for I am charmed.
I care for thoughts, unreal, unbidden,
please leave this heart unharmed....

n'ere, this harsh light betrays,
a world that's ashine through veil,
tendrils of woven doubt in arrays,
What horrors does your world entail?

Oh forget it....  :o(  I can't write poetry any more....  My world's turned Black & White with no greys.

*I think I should just curl up and die!*

Note: _All_ comments screened!



subtle_blues wrote:
Aug. 22nd, 2007 11:05 pm (UTC)
I like these lines best (after a first quick read that is)
and time it seems matters not....
But every beat that pumps through men,
reminds us men, that time's not caught!

Man! your journal desperately needs revival! :)
angiasaa wrote:
Aug. 22nd, 2007 11:19 pm (UTC)
Thanks, though that's a very feministic reaction. :)
Still, if you read it once or twice, your favourite lines might change.

Yup, it does. I'm a virtual dead-man! :(
subtle_blues wrote:
Aug. 23rd, 2007 12:59 am (UTC)
what do you mean by feministic reaction?
angiasaa wrote:
Aug. 23rd, 2007 06:16 am (UTC)
The remark about men.. I was excluding women there..
rythm wrote:
Aug. 23rd, 2007 05:39 am (UTC)
It is really nice.
And I could not pin point 1 line or the other as the best, coz, I find all the lines equally good.

Just start posting more regularly and you would be alive n kicking;)
angiasaa wrote:
Aug. 23rd, 2007 06:21 am (UTC)
You're being sweet. :)

You're right though. It's probably just that I've stopped writing as much. *makes commitment to self*

catchmanblue wrote:
Aug. 23rd, 2007 12:19 pm (UTC)
The dream world...was more real....

couldnt garee more iwth you!!..., fantasy is something of an eternal kind of refuge for the hopeless romantics!!....

awesomely put dude..., its great to be seeing you back in action!!!.....
angiasaa wrote:
Aug. 23rd, 2007 01:50 pm (UTC)
olo! olng itme ot og tsill.... ubt 'Im egtting htere! o:)
buggchaser wrote:
Aug. 30th, 2007 03:24 pm (UTC)
*I think I should just curl up and die!*

thats something like i wud say!!!
angiasaa wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2007 07:52 pm (UTC)
I'm begining to feel that this feeling is becoming more well-known as the times change.... :)
vijucat wrote:
Sep. 30th, 2007 03:49 am (UTC)
Very nice :)
angiasaa wrote:
Oct. 17th, 2007 07:27 pm (UTC)
Thanks vijucat! :)