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In love, with an Angel

  • Feb. 18th, 2009 at 2:29 PM
Day Dreams of Love
Was cleaning out my cupboard the other night, and I found a huge stash of my early pomes.. I was still young when I'd written them, but you can see the disillusioned dream of what i thought love stood for, what it was, what it entailed. This pome explains a part of my vision.

I could'nt stop smiling at those good old days, when I'd spend most of my days and nights alone. I had no one to watch over me, no one to watch over.. And yet, those were among the best days of my life. Perhaps, even the best I'll ever have!

I hope you like this one:



" In love, with an Angel "


Long long ago, we met in a blush,
        a sparrow in the vicinity chirped....
For a moment, I froze my face aflush,
        my heart, in pulsation, my brain, it hurt.

A while in lovely shock I stayed,
        but the value of joy, I found unknown,
no choice in color, my eyes blinked plaid..
        So vocal too, did dry like a bone.

I blinked, I remember, I swallowed hard,
        I knew I was silent and slow.
But you stood there, watching a retard,
        a lonely retard, with you, aglow.

A prickle of a synergetic aura I felt,
        I could'nt detect the cause,
to be attacked below the belt.
        In purity, I obviously had flaws.

Yet, moments past and stay did you,
        I locked and relocked again.
Cogs afreeze in my mind due to you,
        a sweet, soft, sensual pain....

Today, I'm in love, and you are true,
        I knew it then, and yet I do..
I loved an angel, who with my heart flew,
        and came back to me, to love, renew....

Angirasa - 20020726




Kaydeeyoh!

Comments

inspirethoughts wrote:
Feb. 18th, 2009 04:29 pm (UTC)
Cute!
angiasaa wrote:
Feb. 18th, 2009 06:58 pm (UTC)
Thank you. :)
nikitamehta wrote:
Feb. 19th, 2009 05:29 am (UTC)
This pome makes me happy.. it makes me smile. Im in love with it! Angels are beautiful creatures to be in love with. The mood of the pome makes me all warm and fuzzy inside.

Im sure you have the most beautiful angel in the world!

Disclaimer: Weekend fever, I might sound off note.

angiasaa wrote:
Feb. 21st, 2009 02:51 pm (UTC)
Warm and fuzzy.. :) I wish I could spread my arms and turn the whole world into a warm and fuzzy place. :)

Haha, weekend or not, I hope so too. :)
(Anonymous) wrote:
Feb. 21st, 2009 02:06 pm (UTC)
woww..i totally love it..
angiasaa wrote:
Feb. 21st, 2009 02:45 pm (UTC)
Thanks, I always enjoy appreciation.. Though.. Who are you dear anonymous?
pun_princess wrote:
Feb. 21st, 2009 05:02 pm (UTC)
lines I loved :

a lonely retard, with you, aglow.

In purity, I obviously had flaws.

The last stanza is d best :)

Today, I'm in love, and you are true,
I knew it then, and yet I do..
I loved an angel, who with my heart flew,
and came back to me, to love, renew....

B'ful!
angiasaa wrote:
Feb. 23rd, 2009 08:01 am (UTC)
I'm glad you liked it (or at least bits of it) :)

Somehow, I always felt that the last stanza there rhymes a bit overmuch. :) But the image in my head came through, so I did'nt discard it.

There's a ton more of these pomes from my earlier days.. I'll post them up one by one.
pun_princess wrote:
Feb. 23rd, 2009 08:53 am (UTC)
Every poem has certain lines which snatch the limelight away from others :) I just pointed out the lines which impressed me most not that rest of the poem ain't good !

The last stanza is lovely . I have a rule fo poetry writing, never abridge , never manipulate. A poem is bets written from heart , the words flowing on their on.

I am glad you let this one be and see how b'ful it turned out.

Looking forward to more.
Cheers,
angiasaa wrote:
Feb. 23rd, 2009 03:05 pm (UTC)
True, I agree about certain lines standing out, ahead of others.. :)

Yes, I never abridge. My last post contains a pome I actually _extended_. It's the first time I've done something like that. Of course, I had my reasons for doing so.. and I was luckily also in the same frame of mind when I was posting it up so.. Well, I somehow managed to justify the append, even though modification is not a permissible offense my policy. :)

I'm glad I did'nt touch this one too. :)

More to come..
(Anonymous) wrote:
Feb. 23rd, 2009 05:45 pm (UTC)
fab
been a while, ok fine a looong while.

very impressive nevertheless, esp the last para.

I see a lot of the guys have stopped posting, was nice reading your old posts again though...

max (http://www.maxdavinci.com/blog)
angiasaa wrote:
Jan. 10th, 2012 10:12 pm (UTC)
Re: fab
Wah wah ma7x! Glad you liked it. ;)
nivedita n wrote:
Aug. 20th, 2011 03:29 pm (UTC)
Sweet! :) And seriously, i think i still blv in it
angiasaa wrote:
Jan. 10th, 2012 10:12 pm (UTC)
Small joys.. love. :)

And yet, some of us survive completely without it. :(